In Sint-Denijs-Westrem, Deutsche Bank has opened its first “bankstore”, where the clients can nose about financial information before they go to an office window. The bank c
reated this store because the clients, who search on the Internet, only find limited, superannuated information by which the overview of the possibilities will disappear. In the store, clients find different stocks where they can find significant information about the services offered by Deutsche Bank.Finally, the clients, who are interested in these services of this bank, can contact an employee who will gives more practical and detailed information.
reated this store because the clients, who search on the Internet, only find limited, superannuated information by which the overview of the possibilities will disappear. In the store, clients find different stocks where they can find significant information about the services offered by Deutsche Bank.Finally, the clients, who are interested in these services of this bank, can contact an employee who will gives more practical and detailed information.You can find more information about this store here.
Eline Maas
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'nose about information'?
'by which the overview will disappear': not clear at all
'stocks where they can find': please reformulate
significant information?
"Finally": why this linking word - it's not a list, is it?
no comma after clients
will gives?
final sentence is not very informative
Overall: not very clear what this is about
(GJ)
In Sint-Denijs-Westrem, Deutsche Bank has opened its first “bankstore”, where the clients can find financial data before they go to an office window. This store is created because clients can only find limited information on the Internet compared to the internal, clear information about the services offered by deutsche Bank on the walls of the store . If clients are interested in these services, they can contact an employee who will give more practical and detailed information.Hopefully, more banks wil copy this idea of a bankstore so that clients can better compare the services of different banks.
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